The Silent Aviator

This has gotten VERY off topic...not that it matters :twisted: *steals Qi's firearm, uses it to club him into unconsciousness.*

Is it not safe?

It is not safe to go back into the water.

Sounds like something you'd find in a copy of Reader's Digest...I mean this as a complement.

8/10-Very optimistic and emotional... not that that's a bad thing.

*I happen to be a hardcore violence/war movie junkie, so my veiws on this might be less than accurate :)* Personally, I say screw the ratings. Of course, my parents ...

Wow. Very good and original...almost feels like a poem.I thought the long part in which she explains what happened was a bit too long;all the reader needs to know is ...

Sorry.:) Onset=beginning.

Personally, I prefer to immerse the reader in an action sequence or a flashback from the onset of the story. Its how I usually write;just my opinion .

:D Blew me away...I like it a lot. I didn't find anything wrong graamaricaly, but I'm terrible at grammar/poetry structure, so I wouldn't be the one to ask. :(

7/10. Its just...random.

.............. I'm pretty sure I'm not dating my mom.... she doesn' teve know how to use a computer.... more or less chat on one... LMAO :lol:

True. This story is hilarious, but as Crysi said, you can't trust anyone ; its hard seperating truth from lies online.Dating your mom...scary:). This may be diverting a bit from ...

Look who's talking...you're only 13! :) How naughty of you! :lol: Yeah, since both of you demand a sequel, I'll see what I can do... It could be a while, ...

dam it, this is the first and best kick ass military stuff i have read. If you're looking for bombs and guns and tanks, this isn't the story for that.This ...